lovely and powerful, though it might be cause i'm tired but "a test is calcium for the soul" makes no connection or relevance to me. What does calcium have to do with souls?

Hi, I'm with the review marathon, the link is on my profile :)

Urrg I hate bold in fictionpress, I think itallics look so much nicer, stylistically.

I don't think this peice flows as well as it could, but i think the fragmented aspect of it works quite well...the imagery about water in the lungs is very nice.

'a test is calcium for the soul'

I'm not sure what that means, but at least it isn't cliched!

It's quite an angsty peice but the tone is lovely, and I'm glad the end is a more positive note

This is really pretty. I love the imagery of water in your lungs.

"but this won't kill you; i promise"

i can't get if this is a knife behind the back

or teeth clentched too tight,

thinking i wishiwish it would

but either way,

i dig it.

gabrielle.

this link better work. we can talk more then.

[sorry for the short review. my internet time limit is running out.]

I really like this piece, because it's so true. there's only so many tears you can shed for someone before it's like, I think that's enough. I can't cry anymore. Keep up the great work.

Faith

I really love the first stanza.. its extremely powerful and how you repeat the idea in the middle... I also love the play on the phrase.. great piece

I really love this poem. From the title, to the summary, the contents of the poem. My fave.