good except one line that says "One kiss and his harms holding me" when i think you ment his arms

The repetition of the word "me" is extremely annoying and, honestly, I don't think there was a decent line in this poem. It's terribly written.

I like this... I can relate to this a lot.. its very bittersweet and wonderfully written

btw i wrote another piece.. im 90% sure it was you who asked when I was gonna post again

i really like the last four lines! great job!

its scary how i can relate to this, nice work, oh and hehe im fairly new yes, but this is the first time i've heard of you too though, hehe, anyways, keep on writing =)