okies, i really REALLY like the more supernatural side of this story--the death and life deities, and the elf. this chapter was a little more slow-moving, but i still like it. keep it comin', hun-bun!

okies, i liked it. ubers creative.

now that i have established that, just a little criticism. when you are describing, you use a lot of complex sentence structure. this is great, and flows wonderfully...when there aren't five or six of these sentences in a row.

also, just a couple of spelling errors.

but as far as story, the prologue sucks you in. my left hand had to kill my right hand to keep it from going to the next chapter just so i could submit this review, and now i am typing ki nda lo p sided .