Hm, looks like it's mainly dialogue based.
Reminds me of a friend that had really small eyes and squinting.
"She’d never known " - knew?
A bit vague and perhaps could be expanded on. Maybe a bit more depth as well. Slightly interesting in that it's but a dream - try to link it with the rest of the story and what will happen. Describe things better.
Anyhow. Cheers.