Interesting, but is there any deeper meaning? I can see why you got a publishing deal. You're a really good writer.

Well that's upsetting. Dying for a single oil spill, when there will be many more? Not only that, but they die before we even get to know them!

By the way, I think it would be quite helpful if you created a list or a chart that showed all the characters and how they were related. There are so many; one can forget or become confused...

I'm not trying to attack your work by the way; I always love it. I would, however, like it if this piece was longer. It's such a serious subject, containing unknown characters, to be dealt with in so short a chapter.

...*closes eyes* Lovely.

Gosh I love these stories.

:) CD