How can a bubbly, bright, cheerful little girl like you write something dark like this?! (Not to say it wasn't good...) You need slash-therapy! Quick! To the Snarry-mobile!

-Ahem-

You know, I really hope you are the person I think you are, because otherwise there's this totally random author who's sitting at her computer and thinking 'WTF?' A.G? Is this you? If it is, do you remember what A.G. stands for? 'Cause I have no clue. -Grins-

Now that I'm done making an utter fool of myself... Great poem! Dark, but good. No real grammar/spelling errors in this one, but once again I am revising your summary. Don't hate me!

No really big problems, but the summary is just too matter-of-fact for a poem like this. It takes away all the suspense and drama. Remember the Golden Rule: Slash is the key to life. Oh, wait... -Shuffles papers- Sorry, remember the Silver Rule: Tone starts at the summary.

Try something like,

'...'

Sorry, my brain just blew a rasberry. Um... You get what I'm saying, right?

Once again, it was fantastic!