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| JetLinkon 2008-04-12 ch 1,  | abusetell me one thing. Does sarl see her again or do they burn him? |
| Sebastian Osprey 2008-02-26 ch 1, | abuse(claps) Wonderfully creepy! The line "you called yourself an angel" is especially good, it reminded me of the Pantom of the Opera where Erik keeps calling himself Christine's Angel of Music. Hee. Creepy stories are awesome, and it's always great fun to scare other people. (Mister Clockwork is one I've written) |
| SapphireIris 2008-02-11 ch 1, | abuseThere's a nice creepy psychiatric vibe going on here. I can definitely see why you're proud of it. It's disjointed, which I like, even though some don't. The villian's viewpoint is always interesting, especially if he's a little loose in his hinges. (And as for reading my stories - if you want to read the code one, I'll have to overhaul it for you. It's not terribly organized at the moment, and I've only just touched on the intermediate ciphers.) -SapphireIris |
| Rob Goodfellow 2008-01-28 ch 1, | abuseNow -this- is what I'm talking about! |
| Imalefty 2008-01-27 ch 1, | abusewow, this is really scary. well written, but scary. the tone was great - it definitely sounds like he's panicking. i have such mixed emotions for this evil guy... i feel bad for him, but i'm kind of wanting him to die. you use his emotions well! :) everything is really fast paced, and i can definitely sense his anguish. you also set the situation well, even in this short piece. sarl is really creepy. is the guy crazy, or is sarl real? the part about sarl claiming to be an angel was really scary... XD anyway, great job! you've got a nice story here. :) -Lefty (from the review marathon hosted by the review game forum - link on my profile page) |
| omg.it's.wickedjelly 2008-01-24 ch 1, | abuseUm...I don't know what to see other than it was really good. And the narrator's sense of urgency I'm sure you were trying to convey did come through well enough, so you can pat yourself on the back for that. :^) I also liked how you included little to no background detail - it definitely didn't need it. |