i know a boy about my age who is in remission, and i am so grateful that the cancer didn't beat him. i hope this is true, and not just a made-up idea, and i just want to say i'm sorry.

Wow... this was heart-wrenching... nicely done.

~the Stranger in the moonlight

so sad! i really enjoyed your characterization... i felt i got a complete picture of both of them. i like your one-liners, too - they effectively outlined the piece with her comments as the meat... :)

i also liked your description of his smile - "wish-he-had-cheeks-to-stop-his-lip." so funny. :)

hmm as for concrit... i don't really have any. oh maybe... i don't think you need the parentheses around the last sentence of the first paragraph... but that's just me. XD

anyway, good job! keep writing!

-Lefty (from the review marathon hosted by the review game forum - link on my profile page)

One line paragraphs are difficult to pull off effectively, but you did just that. :^) I found this very enjoyable to read and it gives off a strong but meaningful message.

Brilliant. You really developed both characters well in so short a space.