Very creative and interesting. I would not have understood what was going on without your explanation at the bottom, but even explanation aside the piece is very haunting. I like the writing style, it's direct and yet vague. Really sets the mood.

This has nothing to do with the piece but rather your updated profile, but may I ask what GG means? I feel like I should know this, but if I came across the term before I've forgotten the meaning. From the context I would guess genetic female? Also, is female identified different from meaning both FTM and genetic female? Like does it include bi-gendered? Sorry about all the questions... I just find the cultural things related to gender/sex/sexuality interesting.

I like it. Deffinitely would not have guessed what it was about without the explanation, though.

I think that it's a very interesting idea and that you should take it further.

I think this is an interesting concept. You wrote it in a relatively simple, concise way, and it lacked nothing. I think you should try to go on with it!