I'll admit, I didn't understand all of this, like why it seemed that a woman had been murdered, when I thought it'd been a guy O_O. But maybe he's a psychotic serial killer?!?

It's true that there were some stylistic features that didn't really like, like putting thoughts in brackets, but that's just a personal preference.

Otherwise, just a couple of spelling mistakes to look out for...

And some of the imagery, like "Broken shards and a forgotten rag doll" were haunting. Bloody well done. This was awesome :D.

oh wow, this is brilliant.
i like how you formatted it and stuff.
it's so elegant and beautiful and yeah,
i'm not really good at giving 'intelligent' reviews
that sounds smart or anything since i probably spelled
intelligent wrong and am NOT smart but yeah i loved this.
this is totally random but i really want to say something
disturbing and disgusting and have nothing to do with the story
tight now but i'll stop myself. ;D love it.

Watching Sweeney Todd a few weeks ago affected me a lot too. This was just amazing.

This is beautiful and breath taking and tragic and amazing. This style works really well for you, and it's amazing to read. I can't wait to read something else like this from you =]

k.X