short, sweet and to the poet. poetry in motion. life will be better tommorrow. i'm sure of it.

That was lovely

cool, this is the first 55 word story ive ever read and i realy liked it! maby i'll try one myself!
my dad has a story called "Puffed" this is how it goes..
"Puff the magic dragon, fell into the sea, and drowned." horribe right? and that's seriously the WHOLE thing!!
were you serious about "you review mine and i return the favor"? Cuz i have a realy amazing story called "Silvertounge" if you please.
but realy, awsome job!

Awsome job. You know that song is actually my dad's favorite song. I liked your descriptions of the smoke making patterns against the sky. Great job. ^_^

Great story! It's a bit depressing too, I don't know why but it is. Your an awesome writer! ^_^

This is awesome! It's amazing how you can say so much in 55 words. I love the way it has so many levels. You can interpret it in so many ways.
Brilliant.
Captain Walsh

Very nice, you're able to put a lot of detail into such a short word count. That's hard to do.

55 word stories are interesting exercises, I think they get the brain flowing. This one was more thn just an exercise though; it was one full of imagery (I especially liked the patterns the smoke made) and a good choice of words. Well done!
xFestinax

I've always liked 55 word stories. Its interesting to see what people come up with. The imagery for this piece is really realistic and has this type of quiet beauty to it. Nicely done.