I agree with Agustus Stew, a haiku would have made it flow better and plus it's more japanese-like. Spark notes would have been cool too(i

I wish this was a haiku. It would make a beautiful haiku.
I also wish this had sparknotes because it took me so long to read it; however, I like it a lot. Ja ne!
Augutus Stew
PS I admire your alias. Where ever did you come up with it?

i love oneshots
they help me refocus a lot
this was really good
i wanted to see him own some people...but...what can you do
keep writing

This was sweet. the only quibble that i have is the fact that he was wearing sandals. i'm sorry, but i got the image of a dark and menacing ninja... in hawaiian flip-flops! (yes, i know that i'm warped)otherwise, this was great, but needs a little work on puncuation and flow, but you knew that.

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Not necessarily was it a bit slow, but a lot of it was unnecesary. I didn't like the fact that most of this was about nothing. The main character has a sword meets twenty people. End of story. I think it was overdone more than anything.

I did like some the descriptions - although could be improved and not flawless, they were vivid and really captured the scene with the moon and everything. It was detailed and full of imagery as you said. I rather you had spent this description and time on the fight itself, not just how it happened and that they were staring at each other or something like that.

Wow...that was really good. I would love to find out what happens next. Your last line could mean a couple different things if you want to take this further. Wonderful writing, this is the type I look for, I was completely caught up in it. Definitely going in my favs.