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| glimpses from an ivory towe... 2008-04-27 ch 8,  | abuseThe reference to Hawthorne did not go unnoticed :) The use of "what" instead of "who" hit me the strongest in this piece, as the person sees you as a creature, instead of a human being. Oh, so many ignorant people, so few books to whack them with. A little bit confused by the last stanza, I was unsure whether the "you" was referring to yourself, or the owner of the sickly grim smile. Excellent piece. |
| .cupids.battlefield. 2008-04-19 ch 5, | abuseMy favourite chapter. "I wasn't left with anything beautiful" is a brilliant line. ~CB |
| RogueRobin 2008-03-31 ch 8, | abuseThis part speaks strongly to me as well as one of the ones a bit earlier in this series. |
| the face in the window 2008-03-24 ch 14, | abuse"razor-edged eggshells" nice. rowan. |
| Johannas mirror 2008-03-22 ch 1, | abuseVery nice use of spacing an dbolding. pinpoint stars are pretty. And yes we all know what happens then. did you leave the 'i's un capitalized on purpopse or not?\ ~jo |
| simpleplan13 2008-03-18 ch 14, | abuseI liked this... though the beginning confused me. What is the it in it is? Also I dont know what a car park is... but Im sure that's just a cultural thing I like the last two lines. The second to last is a powerful and interesting description and I liked the formatting of the last line and the idea of trying to try |
| IlfirinEstel 2008-03-02 ch 3, | abuse"she never saw/the way i looked at her/(because you know she would have cringed)" I love that. It breaks my heart, but I relate completely. |
| paradigm se7en 2008-02-25 ch 13, | abuse- this is beautiful. I actually just read through the entire series now. even as is, the writing's mesmerising; the emphasis you give with the formatting makes it visceral and that much more atmospheric. kudos. :) |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-21 ch 13, | abuseI like this a lot... the first two lines especially |
| Eminie 2008-02-20 ch 1, | abuseVery short and powerful piece of poetry. I love the imagery you created here. |
| the face in the window 2008-02-19 ch 13, | abuseAwesome so far - amazing imagery. Honestly, I am very envious - /very/. Rowan. |
| Shasta Valentine 2008-02-12 ch 1, | abuseNice imagery. But i felt a little lost. what happens? |
| Laura Elizabeth 2008-02-11 ch 1, | abuseYou have an amazing talent for putting thoughts into poem form. Again, wonderful =) |
| Faith Adeline 2008-02-07 ch 12, | abusei love this series. wonderful job. Faith |
| dress her up in fairytales 2008-02-05 ch 4, | abusepowerful opening line. i'm hooked. |