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| Ninja Liz-chan 2008-03-27 ch 3, anon. | abuseHey hey hey! Sorry for not reviewing the second chapter, so I'll review both 2nd and 3rd today. I like the whole gardian angel bit going on here. God as a ball of light is awsome and magical braclets are always full of win. I can't wait to see more fun and exciting chapters of this. :) |
| AOK 2008-01-28 ch 1,  | abuseOh, interesting...I'm reminded of a modern-day grim reaper when I read about the Guardian... |
| TheMagicalMathPixie 2008-01-27 ch 1, | abuseThis is really interesting! It's probably one of your best yet. It makes me want to cry at the end. |
| Ninja Liz-chan 2008-01-27 ch 1, anon. | abuseSuch a sad story~ Oh wow that was good. I kinda guessed the ending at the begininng XD Oh man...great job! |
| KnittingKneedle 2008-01-27 ch 1, | abuseThis review is brought to you by the review marathon! (link on my profile) Tsk. Naughty naughty teacher, no such thing as a disregard alarm, you always have to do a drill. Actually really stupid teacher. I'm not sure I really understand how Destiny died, something to do with pushing her friend? I'm always fascinated by afterlife fics, I like the empty whiteness you use, though I think a bit more description wouldn't go amiss. The thing about the destiny is a nice bit of foreshadowing to keep a reader interested, it's ironic that her name is destiny and she had a destiny. 'Destiny sneezed three times.' That came out as a really interesting metaphor, before I remebered her name...I like to think it has a double meaning. Embarrassment is spelt wrong by the way, but apart from that spelling is fine... keep writing, I'm interested to know where you take this/ what Destiny's destiny is (tehe) and the signicant of the guardian in sandals! |
| Healing.x.Rain 2008-01-26 ch 1, | abuseWow . . . . I really like this a lot! It's very well written. Great job! Update soon! |
| Tariss-Lightning 2008-01-26 ch 1, | abuseWow, really good! Update soon, cos that´s really, really good! |