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| Fractured Illusion 2008-01-27 ch 1, | abuseIt's a helluva lot confusing with all the names. Beth is the common factor, but dammit how much does she get around? Derek is a prominent character too. "that, maybe, has been dancing" - I feel like you are missing a word there or something. It's very unclear Despite the obscurity, I think it is about a group of friends that grew apart, and Derek was jealous of one of the guys since he was marrying Beth...Right? And the gang called themselves ghosts, and his friends never stopped believing in him? That is what I can gather. If that is it, then I must say, it was very pleasant. Your writing is also gripping, and pulled me in right into every scenario. Well done. - Frac, from Review Marathon, link on profile |