Huzzah! Congrats on finishing your first story! :D

It's a nice, peaceful ending- but I'm wondering. Would it have been better if it was added onto the previous chapter? Probably not- I just like longer chapters. (They give me more to review about! :))

yay. this was such a great story i love the characters in it. good job. cant wait for the sequel

good stuff cant wait to find out what her power was.

Looks like the story is headed to a sound conclusion! Though I'm curious...are you thinking of writing a sequel? Maybe something along the lines of the pack trying to uncover the secret of the locked powers?

I thought it was funny that Lord Alexi said he doesn't bite. No, he doesn't. Because he prefers to roast you quickly with lightning.

Anyways, I like how you let the majority of the wolves go free. That way there wasn't a clear line between good and evil. Because really? That's not always the case.

This chapter has good imagery of the fight...I liked reading it. And for whatever reason I never expected you to actually kill anyone, but I'm glad you did.

Thats awesome he brother is the head of the concil how cool. I want to see there reaction to this. Did they all know?

i started reading your story and i must say that it was very interesting. My only suggestion would be that instead of telling the readers what is going on, you should show.
lemme see if i can give you an example:
Instead of just saying she 'changed', try and describe how she feels when she changes and what happens to her body.
(just one instance)

um, lets see, um for example:

She croutched, feeling the omnimous tremble of her lower back that annouced the chance. Her teeth elongated into deadly incisors, stretching her mouth into a narrow snout. The cutting wind ceased its assult against bared strips of skin as they became blanketed by course a brown fur that snaked across her arched back and down her arms to the sharp claws curling from her fingers.

Wow! That came out of nowhere. Its not perfect but you see my point right? Regardless, this story is really cool. Cool enough to keep me reading dispite my 3-second attention span.
congrats!
-nicola

Ah! What a horribly suspenseful place to end! You will have to update quickly... ;-) It's a fun read. Keep writing!

Ack! Another cliffie! And I sense a potential last-minute save for Kristi...though wouldn't it be interesting if that's not what happens?

gr... here i wait and wait impatiently for another chapter to this great story.. and you give us a cliffhanger.. so not fair..

heh heh.. love it still! I like the addition of the council.. and look forward to learning more about their part in this!

Write more please

Oh goodness i hope they get there in time. What is the council waiting for? Update soon. I have to find out what happends.

Good stuff. I cant wait to find out what happens in the next chapter. Update soon.

I'm glad you included WHY the other pack wants to intrude. It adds to the plausibility of the story.

And curse you. Cliffie.

I like your description of the scout. Even though you didn't even spend an entire paragraph on him, he still comes across as a distinguishable character.

Also, I'm excited for the battle. You've lead up to it well, and I like that you wrote "the largest battle any of them had ever faced; and the only battle for some." I could be interpreting it wrong- but is someone going to be seriously hurt?

As for who should fight the best- my vote is Tarren. Time for him to show us what he can do.