God that's beautiful!

"Do not cry. It's better this way." The tone of this line is so heart-breaking. The words 'do not cry' make the reader want to do precisely that. The speaker sounds as though he's fallen into the veil of death. The line, "only this coffin will hold me for a thousand years," is honest, mature, and profound. Keep up the good work. :)

...I sorta've liked this one.

I really liked,
'Tears fall from your angel eyes/You run to me and grab my hand'
the most though :]

Keep working!! Hey, could you check out my poems if you have the time? Thank you.