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smile for the sunshine
2008-02-24
ch 1,
abusewow, that was amazing. so painful. so real. such a unique approach...an almost selfless one yet at the same time, so broken. i loved it truly. the only thing i could think of to change is spacing. maybe separate "And even as you decomposed..." and those lines from the stanza you have them in and make them a separate stanza. same with the last two lines. but that's just my opinion. i really loved it.

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Jennifer
2008-02-09
ch 1,
abuseIf people wrote like this more often, the world ( in my opinion) would be a hell lot better off. it's hard for people to come across poetry like this. It's poems like this that I love the most. Besides Shakespere. I can never spell his name write.

Anyways.

I seriously love this poem. I just wish mine were as good as these. Keep up the good work!
fairytale failure
2008-02-02
ch 1,
abuseI like how you turned the idea of giving the man flowers, to him being one himself. Also, the repetition of 'anything, anything at all' at the end, only using 'nothing' instead, drives home your point.
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