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Scarlett Wynter 2008-05-27 ch 1,	abusevery humorous, I found this quite enjoyable. I especially like the last line. It made me think of how we all lie to an extent. but "Marlbaros" should be "Marlboros" and you didn't put in any apostrophes! I find the "I'd" in the line "I'd tap your boyfriends ass" to be awkward, I feel as though it should be just "I" but maybe that's just me. anyway, nice work.
Copper Noko 2008-05-27 ch 1,	abuseThis was entertaining. Thank you for the constructive critisism on my poem "The Test". I like most of what you've done and hope to see more! -Copper
lomz 2008-02-23 ch 1,	abusei really really like this - it's so like authentic even without being true (the parts that aren't true, i mean) - like it doesn't matter whether it's true or not because it is what it is and, on a gentler note, pretending is fun. and it's funny.
massattraction 2008-02-12 ch 1,	abuseWOW. thats such a double life, but if you really think about it, how much time to we actually spend spouting off lies to either cover ourselves, or not offend somebody? really makes you think about human nature. well done! i like it =D
Esther Jade 2008-02-04 ch 1,	abuseI found the lack of rhythm a bit annoying. With the strong contrasts, I felt like a bit more rhythm would almost emphasise them more. It's that idea of something completely opposite sounding the same that I would think would work well, possibly. On the other hand, I really like the content. The tone is authentic - rather than some of the "put-on" register some people love to use in poetry. The contrasts are so clever and the choice of words is simple but very effective. I particularly liked the final stanza.
simpleplan13 2008-01-31 ch 1,	abuseI'd tap your boyfriends ass... boyfriend's I like your favourite bands earlier stuff...band's I slept with the pastors son... pastor's I like this.. it flows well and it's an interesting description.. I really love the line about the chalkboard and the ending... the contradictions in the personality is interesting... it's also different because you (or at least I didn't) really like the person, which makes the ending even more ironic... great piece
xDancingintheRainx 2008-01-30 ch 1,	abuseI love the brutal honesty. This piece seems a bit like a list, but it works well that way. The contradictions made for a very interesting piece and I'm left wondering what's true and what's not. Nicely done.
no.peace.los.angeles 2008-01-29 ch 1,	abuseI love the format of this. It's snarky, too, which is also something I appreciate in writing. It makes me wonder which parts are truth & which parts fiction. Just makes it all the more interesting. Great work. Keep writing! :)
KRSmyth84 2008-01-29 ch 1,	abuseI enjoy the contradiction in this poem. Along with the contradiction of situations (drugs are bad; sort crushed ecstasy). I also like the brutal honesty in a world where nobody says what they mean, and what they truly think. The final line is great. It contradicts the honesty in the rest of the poem. Awesome.
Detox 2008-01-28 ch 1,	abuseWow, really interesting.. I know some people like this. Pretty hypocritical. I like how you started pretty much everything with "I" even though it seems to be listing, it works out in this. You spelled Marlboro wrong though. The last line just makes the poem, it's awesome. Nice job. (I don't really do poetry so I can't get technical, sorry)

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