Oh, I just love your description of the glass chamber. That's absolutely stunning. And the lower chamber too--very cool, very creepy. The floating figure is a lovely touch.

The only thing that bothered me was "...which cast its lapis pall upon his broad frame like eldritch fire." It's a fine sentence and fits the feel of the story well, but it took me a moment to remember which color lapis is.

I can't wait to see what happens.

This would have taken ages, 'cause every word looks like its been thought over deeply... descriptions are vivid and amazing, keep writing!
~Lurid~

Why did you go and title this 'Untitled'?! It's a nice piece of work!

I'm keeping tabs on this one. I'd have to agree; the level of detail is good.

Good first chapter, and I can see why it took so long.
Very rich in detail, I am intrigued and hope that you continue with it :P