you are truly an excellent writer. i applaud you. really magnificent.
i really dont understand why people dont read your stories--and i doubt its that they dont review. after reading one of your chapters (you really should post more:), i really couldnt help but review:)
this was . . . wow. im at a loss for words.
spelling/grammar/punctuation was on the spot and i really enjoyed the dialogue in this.
i must say that i enjoy your style of writing. its very . . . elegant? im not sure about the words, but words like neat and graceful come to mind--at least for me. very well worded and the writing flowed very nicely. it is truly a pleasure to read.
overall, superbly done and i commend you. keep writing.