Woah. Great imagery. Awesome short story. You're pretty good at this genre.

- Koki

Oh... My... God! That is freaky! I'm getting serious chills! I could picture everything so well! I love how it's so detailed, but not overwhelmingly so like my friend does. (every other word is an adjective or adverb or something)Oh dear god, hat was amazing! Ok, now I'm going to go read more, I'm addicted. '.- byas!