This story is REALLY interesting! I can't wait to read more!! And again, I have to applaud your taste in music!

This is really interesting! I just started reading it, so I'm going to keep going. I just wanted to comment on the fact that you quoted a Joshua Radin song. I love him and I love that song!

Yay Lanessa! malcoms going to go creepy crazy isn't he?

I'll just have one big review for the next five chapters. :3

Aw. Burn Malcolm. Damn. Now I'm inspired to write an original fiction! And I only have one scene!! ahaha. Poor Malcolm... I think he's realised that the girl knows he stalks her!

Ooh... named Vanessa huh? Every time I think that name I think of somebody as awesome as I am. :3 JK. But yea... it gives an artistic feeling! Even if it may be a random choice, I like it~~
HOT DAMN! Malcolm is one creepy guy! He's starting to remind me of those half in love serial killers now... ok maybe not that extent XD About the spinning out of control thing, that used to happen to me all the time. It doesn't now though. I don't know whether to be grateful or disappointed... spinning out of control takes you places you never knew you could go sometimes :3

Lol price rises XD So old womanish! Ooh. Vanessa's past. Ahaha. I bet there was a guy who was like "OH I LOVE YOU, I AM DEVOTED TO YOU." and then he dumped her. So uh. That's my theory.

-had read a previous reviewer's review- DAMN LAWRENCE! YOU ARE SUCH AN **! Wow... overreacting much! (slightly overexaggerated) But yeah... he didn't think! Oh well. Is Malcolm that good of a friend? There's a friend bond, but I didn't see any best friend things. Well, until chapter 6. Then and only then did I feel sort of sorry for Malcolm. Maybe I'm just an **!!

Hot damn! Fictionpress changed a lot since I was last on it! Now it's practically a clone!! Which isn't a good thing. Huge audience aside. NO I AM NOT ALLOWED TO USE THE LOVE SYMBOL! Oh well. I can get around that..

Anyway. I really liked the table thing, where Malcolm had so many photos that even his huge table couldn't fit them. Wow you must have been very bored.. XD

Lol Laurence leaving at the end. WTF? Good job dude! That seems kind of weird, actually... S: AHEM ok next chapter!

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So, I have to say I like Chyler. It's about time someone gave Laurence a wake-up call. Really? To go on a date with the girl his friend was stalking? I didn't htink guys could be so stupid...Anyway, great job with the detail in this chapter. I also live the comment about the spaghetti. It made me laugh.

You might want to go back and do a bit of editing in some of your chapters. There aren't a lot, but I did see a couple of errors here and there. Thought I would give you a heads-up. That's the only real thing I can complain about. >.<

You did great with this piece!

Uh-oh. This can't be good. Malcolm'g gonna be pretty mad if he finds out what his friend is doing, or at least I think he would be. You portrayed Vanessa very well in this chapter. Again, I felt like I got to know the character better. It makes up for the first chapter. ;) Great job on that.

This chapter was a little longer, which was good, but I think it would be better if you could elongate them a bit. Perhaps you could describe in more detail the bookstore or about the books, she bought, etc. It could add a little more depth to it.

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Wow, Malcolm really is a little obsessed, huh? A whole drawer full of things...Anyway, I really like that we got to see more ofMalcolm's character. I felt like I got to know him a little better in this chapter and you even gave a reason as to why he was keeping her things. Great job!

I feel that the chapters are a bit short. It seems like right when I get into reading about what is going on, the chapters are over. I just thought I would throw that out there.

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Aww, Malcolm missed his chance to be able to talk to her. Well, at least it's not like Laurence didn't try. You managed to describe the woman very well, which gives te reader a good picture as to what is going on. I always like that. :)

Again, I would have liked to learn more about the two main characters. It seems like they are really in tune with each other and it's a shame reader can't be as well. I know you can describe them better, especially since I read the woman's.

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Wow, that really is sort of creepy. I wonder why Malcolm just could go and talk to her. I hope we can find out more in the next chapters. I like the fact that you have a unique direction in which your story is going. It's refreshing to read something different instead of the same ol', same ol'. Good job.

I would have liked to know a little more about the characters you introduced. It seems like all we really know are their names. Perhaps you could describe thier inner thoughts a bit more? That might give you characters a bit more realism.

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Is this story finished? I hope not, I really like it :)

Very interesting, good start. You should keep going most deffinetly.