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| Scooz 2008-03-28 ch 1, | abuseHeh, very cute. I had a friend in denial about her eavesdropping issues that led to an interesting conversation. I think you could have done better though. It's brief and you get the general gist of it, but I think you could make it a bit longer, adding in some additional humor before the ending. Just think about it for awhile and see if you can't think of some additional jokes to add. |
| openheadspace 2008-01-29 ch 1, | abuseHa ha. I like how she just catches herself. Good job for first humor piece. .::thumbs up ::. |
| perpetual questions 2008-01-29 ch 1, | abuseThat is funny. And very, very real. Great work. |