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you are so lavely

hello

I like the way you've taken reality and heightened it. Everything is too intense to be real, like a film with supersaturated colors, but it's all recognizable.

"Lethal warmth" is a great idea, but I think "tires scream" is too over-the-top: "danger-yellow" does enough.

I noticed that you have a few long "in-progress" stories going. I encourage you to also keep writing pieces such as these - small, controllable, poignant.

That was a cool story!

I love your brilliant writing.

So poetic for such an unusually beautiful scene.