Finally, some poetry that I actually like. I really liked your work. There were only two things I didn't like, but I really loved the fluency of the rest. The only parts I didn't enjoy were:

Who kept quiet her longings, her hopes, wishes, and fears

If you get rid of the wishes and have it say, "Who kept quiet her longer, her hopes, her fears" that it would flow better.

And always felt like no one cared at all who threw the dice

I understand this line, but it confused me the first time. I think you could change the wording to, "And always felt like no one cared, of all who threw the dice."

These are just my thoughts and suggestions, hope they help. And thank you for writing this piece, it was the best poetry I have read in a long while.