|Reviews for Clementine|
| Nine Types of Normal 5/27/08 . chapter 1
This was one of the saddest, sweetest things I've ever read! Is it bad that I like Andromeda? I hope not, because I simply adore her! The writing was alright and the ideas wonderful, but you could have put a little more thought into editing it, because it sometimes finds itself lacking in fluency.
Here are some things that stuck out in my mind:
"Black breeches, black boots, black blouse, black knee-length boots, even a black mask. His hair wa s a dirty blond, and drawn back into a small black ribbon at the nape of his neck, his skin was pale, and his eyes behind the mask were grey."
-Have you seen (or read, which I haven't yet) The Princess Bride? Because that is SO Wesley!-
"Not realizing that they were alone, they discussed what had happened."
-'Not realizing that they weren't alone,' you mean.-
"frighteningly low neckline"
-Like Clementine, like Andromeda.-
"Delights in not telling..."
-Artemis Fowl much?-
Keep up the good work,