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| lost for words 2008-01-29 ch 1, | abusePretty good, it has some nice phrasing. The fourth stanza is my favourite. Overall I thought some of the line breaks seemed to break the flow a little, and perhaps the piece could have used some more specific imagery. But really not bad, and you ended it nicely. Good work. |