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| PencilSketchS 2008-04-21 ch 1,  | abuseI'm not really any good at constructive criticism so all I can say is that I think your characters are awesome, that I'd like to read more about them, and that I have no clue what just happened at the end. Kai is weird and Jet is a bit insane, and yeah they're confusing but half the fun about reading is figuring out how exactly the characters minds work. Cool story. I'm waiting to read more. |
| ElevatorMusic 2008-02-28 ch 1, | abuseHm. 'Martin Catholic College (MCC)," fingerless bike gloves. That rings a bell...hm I wonder where I've heard that before? hey how are ya beautiful? Just one question. Has elfie got a boyfriend with an innocent charm and firery red hair? hm? Awesomefull story!..another fav oh and a hug will be fine. Dont feel like a tackle ps. can't wait to see ya on saturday! |
| Kyuuketsuki-Yaoi Fan- 2008-02-19 ch 1, | abuseIts A Uber Good Story Please Update Soon |