i love how simple and real this is
good one!

I love the realism depicted here. Perfect.

i love love love this
its so beautiful in its simplicity

especialy the last line,
it made me chuckle.
dont know why though, i'm just wierd
forgive me?
haha.

I like the contrast between "you" and her, how "you" doesn't really care and doesn't see her as significant, and she is always thinking about "you." I love the last line, it's sad but appropriate.

I like this... the descriptions are beautiful and I love the ending... very bittersweet.. awesome job

this is so pretty and lovely

i love every line

very good. i love the simplicity of it. great job :)
Faith

This is absolutely lovely, from start to finish.
The entire thing is brilliant.

so beautiful and slow; a
very well written write
that leaves me sighing in
complete understanding.
amazing.

awesome. there's a rhythm to this that makes every word perfect. I love the second stanza particularly, not least because I'm a cummings admirer. cheers.

I think this is so cute!