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| siphoned afterglow 2008-01-31 ch 1,  | abuseTo me, this was about being scared to being drowned in life's miserable problems that try to drag you down with them. Nice work and great wording. |
| Midnight In Eden 2008-01-30 ch 1, | abuseI really like the idea of this and the presentation. My only qualm is the mouthful of a second line you've created. Lines one and three are simple but profound. The middle seems almost too transitional and blah. Tweaking that would make this fantastic. Midnight |