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| freaky.little.devil 2008-06-04 ch 1,  | abuseWait. Was it a man? Or a... creature? |
| AK the Twilight 2008-05-04 ch 1, | abuseOoh, spooky. You described the sense of panic very well, although the entire package feels short, giving you less opportunity to experiment with the detailed and vivid language you show in this story. It feels more like a prompt than a story, in fact. You delivered a strong sense of nervousness and although the cliffhanger bothered me, this was a great read. Thumbs-up. |