Silencers still have a bit of sound, dear d:P

"“Sorry, I twisted the door but it was stuck and I couldn’t stop myself so I bumped into the door,” he smiled sheepishly."
Lol that sounds like something Aleks would say dxD

"I started cracking up because Lus ran into the door and also because I was so scared."
Sounds a lil funny again. Maybe "...cracking up for two reasons: one,...and two, because I was so scared."?

Hm...either no quotes around "Alpha mode" or just around the word "Alpha" would be better if you ask me, but then again, that's just my opinion d:P

Yes, very glad indeed d:X

Wait, I'm confused...where did the blankets come from and what happened to going to Mel's place because she had tons of food there? o.O

"Lus and Lani slept on one side of the floor with their arms wrapped around each other and I didn’t know whether to sigh in adoration or scoff in disgust."
Sigh in adoration! d:D lol anyways...make it two sentences; it's a run on after "around each other."

"I woke up and I didn’t feel as if I didn’t get any sleep at all but the sun shining through the kitchen window was telling me otherwise."
I think you meant "I woke up feeling as if I didn't get any sleep...", because what you wrote means that you felt like you got enough sleep d:P

"I looked around the room and Lani and Lus were still entangled into each other and I smiled."
Maybe, "I looked around the room and smiled. Lani and Lus were still entangled in each others' arms."?

I think that your little love affair should be a bit more developed in the earlier chapters still d:X It seems kinda random, that cute little kiss scene at the end...

Write more, Melly! d:D

Wow. Guys never change, even in stories, huh? Always ignoring the fact that the girl is RIGHT THERE! dxD

"“And so he has commanded, and so it shall be done,” I announced sarcastically."
Nice. d:P

Yeah. Shut up Mel. d:P

Yeah. It's broken. d:P

"“**, this is more exercise that I could ever take in one day,” I huffed."
It sounds funny...maybe "...this is more excercise than I ever thought I could take..."?

"I paused. “Like this.” Then I pushed him down the stairs. Luckily for him, he caught onto the railing before he tumbled down the stairs.

“Jesus, Melly!” Alex protested.

“Jesus is dead, silly,” I said back."
dxD!

He DID tell you not to look, dorkus d:P

Since when do you worry about your language? d:P

" I laughed and the tension in the air broke and I felt a bit lighter."
It's kind of a run on and doesn't flow very well. Maybe break it up into two sentences?

And since when are we not married? D: lol jk

"There was a girl about thirteen or fourteen years old and she was hunched over the sink."
Try, "There was a girl, about thirteen or fourteen years old, hunched over the sink."

Gee thanks. I feel so singled out d:P

That little girl's last sentences were kinda ominous, no? d:P

*in response to the other story's review reply* Lol okay then; I suddenly feel alot better about Piper dxD! And yes, I recall your strict story format d:P

Now on to this one...

"“Authority over chemistry, Melly,” Aeolus triumphantly said.

“Chemistry?” I mouthed to Lani.

She shrugged."
Haha. dxD

"No way,” Lani said. “Aeolus is stronger, why doesn’t he go with you?”

“Because I’m going to be by your side watching out for your safety!” Lus argued.

“Lani,” I lay my hand on her arm. “I’m going to be okay. Trust me.”

She gritted her teeth in anger. “I don’t like this.”

“Maybe we should have left her somewhere so she couldn’t nag me about this,” I joked. I swallowed the lump in my throat and walked off, away from my best friends."
But I worry about you, Melly Dearest! D:

"I didn’t know he had Shifted back and I yelped in surprise."
Is it sad that I can really see you yelping? dxD

"He put an arm around me and said, “I think you’re beautiful in your Wolf form.”"
Aw

... Like I said.

You had better not die. -_-

"I also found out that Isaac was 21 and can go for a long time without talking."
That was kinda random, no? Maybe put it somewhere where you introduce Alex and Isaac in one of the earlier chapters?

"This is what I wanted to do. I’ve always just once, wanted to be a hero. Even though there’s a good chance that I might die tonight… I wouldn’t miss this for the world."
That's the Mel we all know and love! d:P

I so hate you both. -_-'

I so COULD kick your ** in that all human dimension! D<

"Werewolves didn’t have last names, feeling as if it tied them down to their human forms too much."
That makes sense d:)

Sadly in real life, I'm a very bad shot when the target is small D: Aim at a person 10 feet away? No problem. Aim for the heart or the forehead or the hand? Not a chance in hell unless I'm allowed to use more than one bullet, possibly everything in the round dxD

"I wish I could go more into details but I didn’t know a thing about guns since someone felt I didn’t need to know anything."
dxD!

Wait, so I DO get to fight? o.O Or is the gun just for my own protection?

Ah...you at least know about the safety lock, huh? dxD

Show off.

I got on top of him, huh? dxD! Lol okay I'm sorry excuse my perverted mind. dxD

I feel like Bella Swan now d:)

Ew. Nice way to kill them. ><

"“Perhaps we taste the best. Perhaps zombies simply love the taste of werewolf flesh.”"
Yes, Professor. d:P

Haha, the **. d:P

Alex...could this new gentleman possibly be...Brady in disguise as a character? d:P

Wow. This zombie problem spread pretty fast.

"As I was walking towards the small group, I heard a chorus of victorious howls and I felt chills go up and down my spine as I thought, We’re fighting back!"
That sends chills down MY spine.

Hehe I can imagine your oh so toothy grin dxD

I read your revised chapter 3 *no more mysterious chapter zero?D:*. The only thing is I believe you meant "her" in this sentence:
"“Go find her and stay with here, now!”"
d:P

Okay, now onto this chapter...

Aw...poor Melly. d:( You're bro is an ** when he's worried, isn't he?

Wow. Zombies are following you everywhere, huh, Mel? d:P

This prologue doesn't really set much of a set mood, and the mood is quickly destroyed when the narrator asks "Would a pack of werewolves be able to win against a mass of zombies?"

real zombies = weak everywhere
super natural zombies = only brain, anywhere else, they STAY ALIVE!

the begging fight seemed a little fake, the ending fight was a little hard to understand...was the zombie on the 3rd motorcycle!?

Well lucky for me I may not know much about werewolves thanks for the helpful fact that they don't exist.
But lucky for me i do know about zombies...because there are people who have become zombies before...that and i also know the super natural state of zombies, and dawn of the dead is right at times and wrong at other's but no zombies aren't smart for they have primitive instincts. and second zombies can only move fast at first, they basically become one whole energy source, and as they waste energy, just like any living thing it needs to eat to regain energy which is where humans come into play. Zombies will instantly regenerate their whole body and will be able to move quick again for it just got recharged. and over time zombies get slower as there energy exhausts and eventually will be immobile and die...
so why do zombies need there brain's you ask simple, to do there primitive tasks, without them they cant work...and yes, it is possible to get people into primitive states of mind by messing with there minds but i don't think it would be wise to tell you how...

either your foreshadowing way to much or your trying to set up irony in a way to obvious tone.

Well first off you clearly have no understanding of how Dimensions work...but idk that really matters if it is even relevant to the story.

well it's good you used many references to describe appearances IE: Twilight series, or Van Helsing...because i have actually never seen either so i don't know what they look like, and other people who haven't seen or read either wouldn't understand either.

werewolves aren't actually cute and fluffy...jk

hmm well so far alright, but there's so much information being thrown at the reader in the first paragraph...so many people are introduced, i don't know if i can remember them all

Arrgghh...!
I'm really sorry MellyIsSmelly but I can't read further than this chapter! Zombies + me = NIGHTMARES!

Otherwise I'd read it because your writing is BRILLIANT.

SO OTHERS SHOULD READ IT! AND REVIEW IT!

like now.

kthnxbai