Reviews for The whole you - FictionPress.com

snowdance-lyghtning 2008-04-20 ch 1,	abusethis is the kind of poem people always go "aw" at because it's so sweet. It's a good poem, but (for future reference) you could add more stanzas to it with more description. PS: REVIEW MARATHON TIME! (link in my profile!)
simpleplan13 2008-02-23 ch 1,	abuseOK I like the idea of going from the things you want to their love that's really great and I like the part about wanting to look at their face when they are no looking a lot... it's great... I'm not a big fan of the format.. the first two lines of each stanza seem backwards and I know that's on purpose but Im not a big fan.. also I think it you're gonna phrase things like this you need punctuation... In the second stanza I think you need to put when at the beginning of the third line to connect it the rest of the piece Also two of the lines are really a bit too long for the flow so I might work on that But it's still a beautiful and emotional description of love that everyone (well i hope) can relate to... very nice piece
kloun doll 2008-02-18 ch 1,	abusethat's a very sweet poem, I like this: Your face I want to look at secretly when you're not looking back
Dreaming Chica 2008-01-31 ch 1,	abuseWow! That was absoloutly beauitful! I love the way you described everything you liked about the person, it added depth and emotion to the poem! ♥ Dreaming Chica ♥