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Fictatiousrambler
2008-03-31
ch 1,
abuseWow excellent imagery but the bit i didn't like was the bold Y, it really stole from the imagery in this.
Kiss.Today.Goodbye
2008-03-21
ch 1,
abuseThe first two lines create an interesting, reflective opening which works really well. Imagery is excellent - particularly likes lines 9-13.
Not sure about the bolded "y" - it just seems out of place.

Otherwise, I think this is a really beautiful piece.
simpleplan13
2008-02-03
ch 1,
abuseI like this... a lot of the imagery is really great... like the stained class windows and you being a novelty item... the ending was really great... the only thing I didnt like was the bolding of y in girl-thingy.. that seemed odd to me.. other than that awesome piece
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