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| Fictatiousrambler 2008-03-31 ch 1, | abuseWow excellent imagery but the bit i didn't like was the bold Y, it really stole from the imagery in this. |
| Kiss.Today.Goodbye 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abuseThe first two lines create an interesting, reflective opening which works really well. Imagery is excellent - particularly likes lines 9-13. Not sure about the bolded "y" - it just seems out of place. Otherwise, I think this is a really beautiful piece. |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-03 ch 1, | abuseI like this... a lot of the imagery is really great... like the stained class windows and you being a novelty item... the ending was really great... the only thing I didnt like was the bolding of y in girl-thingy.. that seemed odd to me.. other than that awesome piece |