 Tranquil Thorns 2008-04-26 . chapter 1I was really itching to put a colon after the first line (I’ll ask you once more:).
I'm not sure why, but I think it would fit better than a comma. I thought it would tie the two lines together nicely, because the second line reads like a command.
A minor change, I know, but it's really up to you. |