Wow. Dani. That's awesome! So sad, but such a great story so far! Keep up the awesome good work, I can't wait to read more.

~Anna

Aww sad! Is the by chance the same Coop as WH?

My God... 0.0

Thats the best piece of writing I've read in a long time. Brilliant!!

Don't they usually have the wake AFTER the funeral? But whatever, I dunno how the process works. I bet that Rachel's face is on the MISSING posters. And ugh Coop, it's not your fault!

Update REALLY soon! 'Kay??
~Kioasakka

Whoa, okay, Rachel's really cool. Weird, but cool. Is she albino or something? Or does she just hate the sun? You've managed once again to successfully draw me into one of your stories. I totally envy your talent.

~Kioasakka

Aww, that's so sad D:
Coop is an interesting name, but I'd expect nothing less than interesting names from you :3

Ugh, I hope he doesn't go all emo like "oh it's my fault" on us...

~Kioasakka

I love the dream, just love it. Problems? The rediculously large explanation of her clothing. I do enjoy the book vs chores vs outside moment but hey.

Damn, lady. You certainly know how to do depressing in an opening chapter. How the rest of this tale isn't as dark as this. Clinically executed, spiffingly done. 10/10. I especially love the cop talk. Good dialogue.