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| william stanley 2008-04-04 ch 1,  | abuseI've read a few of your pieces now, and I appreciate your style -you're very to the point and simple, no frills. I like it a lot actually. And you have the talent of rhyme, which I do not have. Ha. There's only one thing that I have to say and that is you mean to say, "There are shapes poisoning..." not there "There is shapes..." other than that, this is my favorite out of your published works here. Keep writing! I likey! |
| Lurid Black 2008-02-15 ch 1, | abuseGreat, how long ago did you write this? Nvm, awesome, as usuall! |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-02 ch 1, | abuseWhat the world know as something happy... knows There is shapes poisoning this clean white paper,.. There are I like this... the descriptions are great and I love how you never actually use the word.. that was great.. I might separate that last line into two lines though, but other than that I thought it was great |
| Katrina Zeffirelli 2008-02-01 ch 1, | abuseLove it, as always! =) I like how the happy is in quotes! It adds to the poem. |