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| Guardrail 2008-03-12 ch 1,  | abuseGosh you've written like five million poems since I reviewed you last a while ago! Well not that many haha. I'll have to do a better job keeping up I guess. This poem is great. It kind of reminds me of the one you wrote with Miss Chill in it. It's the same kind of characterization in a poem. I love it. You should try writing stories as well as poems I think. You'd probably be great at it. |
| angel953 2008-02-22 ch 1, | abuseThis is really cool. I like it a lot. Some of the lines are cut a little weirdly, but even those are okay. The only thing I didn't really like was how you repeat "never you, never you" in some places. I know it's probably to add emphasis, but I think it disrupted the flow of the poem a little bit. Overall, I think this is a really great piece though. ~angel953 |