wow, gorgeous. you have great control over your writing. your narration is steady and clear; well done! I love the idea of this, and it works so well as a short story.

Oh, I can tell you're definitely going to be bad for my academics!

First off, I'm assuming you're actually from England. This is not just my hard-core and undying obsession with all things British, the voice was very clear and level without sounding forced. The only thing was that I think some Brit-Speak slipped into Lyla's voice, off the top of my head, I can think of "straight away" and "go with," not very Yank things to say.

Overall, I really enjoyed the simplicity and honesty of this story, you found a place between plot driven fluff and egotistical self-searching boredom that I detest in my fiction classes. I also was glad that Lyla and Sid didn't necessarily end up together, definitely made it more real. The sense of ambiguity was well-written as well, we're not left hanging, but we're not exactly sure what happened to Lyla, we just know she stays with him.

I'll try and check out more of your stories when I'm out from under my mountain of homework.

Good job!

Emily