*sniffles* one more and im crying. so good keep it up. ull never be invisible to me, alwayz on the surface of my mind xD

Okie doke! I'm about to get mean, so I apologize in advance. I'm a pretty nice person, but you probably care a great deal about this poem, and I'm about to somewhat 'attack' it, so -- I apologize in advance.

This is chockfull of cliches. I'm not saying it's not right to feel the way you feel, and express it this way, but A LOT - A LOT - of people use the same sort of imagery I see repeated here 'dying inside', 'tears cover the floor', comparing teardrops to rain, 'cold winter day', 'screaming inside', 'shrieks', 'no one hears me'.

Apart from that, in your summary, you say 'cus' instead of 'because'... And, yeah, I'm one of those sticklers for the correct spelling when it can be correct. Sorry!

- Clap Trap, from Review Marathon [link in my profile]

This poem is very powerful. I can relate to it very much. There are many times when I feel invisible too. The theme is something that many people can relate to, even if they don't like to admit it. You have a real gift for conveying emotions. You should try writing some fiction! I bet your character development would be amazing.

this one just about everyone should love because it's understandable and we can all relate. u're very good at taking feelings that all of us have and expressing them through words. u're a good writer in that way. nice poem

Nice; a little cliche, but very nice.

wow, i loved this *adds to favorites*

really good. It would probably flow better if you broke it up a bit differently but it has a lot of emotion in it. :) And also. Echoes and shrieks. need to change that. but other than that really good. :)

wtf, very...sad, I can almost feel your pain. :( But I like it, very nice

I think it would flow better if the lines were broken up differently.
Ex:
Rather than 'Cover the floor, like pouring rain on a winter day'
Maybe you could say
'Cover the floor
Like the pouring rain
On a cold winter day'

Whoops, I just put in extra words...

And 'echoes' should be echo or 'shrieks' should be shriek, but not both.

All in all, a good poem as far as message and emotion goes. =]

Wonderful descriptions and concept :)

Invisibility
Is a cloak;
Shoulder out of your transparent grey,
And see the world of color.
It is invisible to the watery eyes, as well :)