Actually really enjoyed this. The line “A dirty bastard robbing his concubine at midnight.” has almost burnt itself into my retinas. Very nice line. Not overly sure why.

Good work. :]

Wow, this is extremely good. very deep. i like it a lot.

Not quite sure I understood that. Still, it conveyed excellent emotion.

Hey. This is deep. Made me think, y'know.

Great title.
I really liked the line, 'And he murdered twilight, and he forsook his muse.'

There's only one thing that kind of bothered me, and it's a lame thing at that.
'Is there nothing by but

thick skinned-death?'

I think that should be one line. The way it is now it just seems like prose with a random line break. Though the other parts where you did that I think were fine because you used and at the beginning and they were for effect.

Interesting imagery, and strange ideas. I especially like the "genie" reference. A good, deep poem all in all.