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| seasick 2008-02-12 ch 1, | abuseGreat style, or lack of style. The choatic logic of the faithless mind has never been so perfectly displayed. Have you ever read the book, "Survivor" by Chuck Palahniuk? |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-02 ch 1, | abusereally interesting piece that definitely makes you think.. the format was interesting... I liked the part about the mind and the brain not being synonymous and I really LOVED the ending stanza... beautiful piece One question is there a reason you made pleasurable into two words? |
| Tytherpol 2008-02-02 ch 1, | abuseshit this poem is /perfect/ in my mind except the title of question i hate but the poem itself is incredible. like the kind you finish reading then you read again then you're just really glad you read it because everything in your mind was just awakened gah i just really hate that title it looks gross it is a quote from a certain person or just to represent a quote in general? all of your imagery/symbolism falls into place perfectly and your itallics are just flat out beautiful. sorry that i can't give a well-rounded critique on this one. |