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| insanity-ward 2008-08-22 ch 6,  | abuseoo! i read the whole story again and its too cool! but know how Vakain looks and all, is it like Zuko form Avatar? if it is i sincerly hope he grows his hair, =P. and you know how the Alazuri heal, well of course you know, your the author! but that reminded me of the way medical nins heal in Naruto. and the undead people... they reminded me of the dead corpes in Harry Potter and the Half-Blood Prince. only assuming of course that you know what Avatar and Naruto are and that you've read Harry Potter. just some interesting things i noticed, Lol. anywayz, wiced story but i can't wait to see more Elrien and Vakain parts (that is if you continue the story! which i hope you do!) |
| Fae 2008-07-13 ch 9, anon. | abusesigh...I thought ur plot was wonderful...sigh hope u have that rewrite ready soon when ur story is rewritten I'll be the happiest person on the face of this planet |
| Katherine-the-greate 2008-06-25 ch 8, | abusewell. that was a surprise ending to this chapter. great work. i loved all the fights and the armor and everything! please update soon |
| Katherine-the-greate 2008-06-23 ch 7, | abuseoh. someone sounds mad. great work |
| Katherine-the-greate 2008-06-23 ch 6, | abusewow. great suspence. i can't wait to see the fight. where has the prince been this whole time, though? I loved the grave stuff in the last chapter. great descriptions. it made a great picture. |
| Katherine-the-greate 2008-06-23 ch 5, | abuseagain great work. i'm really enjoying this story |
| Katherine-the-greate 2008-06-23 ch 4, | abusethat's a sad ending to the chapter. i'm liking where this is going, i can't wait to see more |
| Katherine-the-greate 2008-06-23 ch 3, | abusewow. emotions are running high now. i can't wait to see how the reutrning trip back is. =] |
| Katherine-the-greate 2008-06-23 ch 2, | abusegreat chapter. i love your descriptions and their characters. nice work |
| Katherine-the-greate 2008-06-22 ch 1, | abuseI like the sound of this story. and the warning about the killer gerbils. I'll be sure to stay away from any of those... |
| BWeep 2008-06-12 ch 9, | abuseI think a huge Aw is in order! I will be beyond glad to help with the beta stuffz~ but it'll have to wait until after next week as I am horrendously busy with college. I think you just have to tweak it a little as a few parts (or sentences) give the story a slightly childish feel. |
| envelope 2008-05-31 ch 9, anon. | abusehiatus!!?? im depressed now =( seriously, this is a really good story! its been a while since ive read anything as interesting as this. i shall wait for your rewrite! |
| Raspberry Jam 2008-05-22 ch 1, | abuseI love your story, I personally like it the way it is right now but then again I dont know where you are going with this story. But this story is wonderful and I will be dutifully awaiting the rewrite! :) |
| insanity-ward 2008-05-21 ch 9, | abuseNO! you must not! this story is so way freakin awesome! it's one of the best i've read on this site! but if you want to re-write it, i guess i shall have to wait. and im sorry, but if i become your beta, i'll totally kill your story. Lol. can't wait til your update! =] |
| maidengarnet 2008-05-21 ch 9, | abuseI love your story... and I shall wait for more! The only thing that ever bothered me about it, was that Elrien, for the most part, seemed to think that lots of ways about the Vordikan were better than her own people... show some country pride! I can't wait until you put it up again! |