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| Chancel Jordan 2008-05-28 ch 1,  | abuseSounds like Rose's brother has the makings of a Machiavellian rake! Looking forward to this story! |
| Mercyette 2008-05-25 ch 1, | abuseReview for the Review Game's Review Marathon! (link in lookup) Aww, I always love playing on the emotion of older brothers! I think they are some of the best characters that can be involved in a story. I really like how you managed to give us a clear image of the setting. Great job with that. You words are very descirptive as well. I would have liked a bit of a longer chapter, but it's just the introduction as well. Using questions is a nice way to get information across to the reader, but make sure you don't overuse a good tactic! :) Reading on... |
| sesshy 9118 2008-03-19 ch 12, | abuseGreat story! I absolutely loved it! Especially since Rose somehow reminds me of myself... update soon pls..poop, kitten! |
| shums 2008-03-18 ch 12, | abusei loved the conversation and her thoughts~! nice chapter~ |
| shums 2008-03-02 ch 1, | abusegreat story~! keep writing...I'll keep reading :) |
| Katherine-the-greate 2008-02-24 ch 1, | abuseI like this story. The tense is a little funny, but I think it reads fairly well. Thanks for posting. =] Mistake And Rose was a good friend of them |
| acriter 2008-02-15 ch 8, | abuseA good continuing of the story although there are a couple of typos and grammar mistakes, I'm sure you'll catch them when you look through it again. Keep up the good work! |
| acriter 2008-02-15 ch 1, | abuseIt's an interesting concept and I like the way you have begun it. It has an almost fairytale quality to it but at the same time seems to have been brought into the 21st century. I will read on! |