|Reviews for if only the sun could shine a little brighter|
| shadow-of-a-trackless-sea 5/4/08 . chapter 1
sad but sweet. i liked how you compared monotomy and a highway, very interesting.
| i'd delete this if possible 3/6/08 . chapter 1
I know the feeling. Being trapped in monotony is so suffocating, isn't it? And it seems like everyone else knows where they're going ("those cars... [that] are anything but still") and you're just stuck in one place, not knowing where to go from there. At least, that's what I get out of this. I like it.
| relapse into change 2/18/08 . chapter 1
hmm i like this
i think in the last stansa i'm just instead of i am just sitting...would flow better with the poem..but that's just
my opinion. :]
| a silenced revolution 2/7/08 . chapter 1
I've always loved the sound of cars, and now I know why: "they are anything but still." Lovely work.
| by His blood 2/3/08 . chapter 1
i need prayers very badly right now.
please, just ... pray for me. please.
i don't know what else to say. please. i need help.
i need your prayers. please. right now.
| Faith Adeline 2/2/08 . chapter 1
Great poem. I really liked it. Keep it up.
| Autumn Lace 2/2/08 . chapter 1
| simpleplan13 2/2/08 . chapter 1
but the rush of passing cars on the highway/outside my window are more than exhilarating... the rush... is more than
I like the subject of the piece a lot.. its really interesting and the way you described it you can see and hear it... beautifully done