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| hey maria 2008-02-02 ch 1,  | abuseI absolutely love the second stanza, the way you draw comparisons between artists, conquerors, and prophets. The last two lines were the perfect ending. I think you should work on the first stanza though. It feels like you're just explaining, telling instead of showing. But the rest is great. |