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| grotesqueburlesque 2008-07-29 ch 13,  | abuseI LOVED it. You have such a raw voice, and it's so believeable. I truly hope to see you published some day. Really, it was amazing. |
| Guatemalan Rocker chikk 2008-07-11 ch 13, | abuseand i read this in the course of 1-2 hours! wo! go me! haha anyways...this was DEPRESSING.. its sad what people do to others and pretend they dont care..but thats life :( was that one of your poems [bailey's chapter] |
| AlyDanielle 2008-06-29 ch 12, | abuseThis story was amazing. I really loved it, because I know what all of them are going through. I would have loved to have heard a chapter by Sam O'Dea, he sounded like a character, lol. |
| click-HERE-if-your-stressed 2008-02-20 ch 13, | abusethat was...amazing. no other words to describe it. i loved the style it's in! you really get to see what each character is thinking, and i love the way you saved the main character for last. it just really helped to build up the drama. and...what an ending! your words are too true, too true. i have respect for you, man |
| drkprinkeswarir 2008-02-17 ch 13, | abusethat was wonderful. nothing more to say. all though i would've liked to hear more from bailey... |
| Sophie Stone 2008-02-17 ch 13, | abuseAh! I was mentioned! I feel super special! And finally, we hear from Bailey. I think you should do a sequel type, from Bailey's perspective, of what goes on after this. What happens to her. |
| friend 49 2008-02-17 ch 13, anon. | abusefor the sake of non-puffy eyes i'm not going to say a word. just take that action as your review, okay? |
| Sophie Stone 2008-02-16 ch 12, | abuseWow... this is so true and so thoughtful. To be honest, the earlier chapters didn't interest me so much, I was just reading them to see what the outcome was. They were good, just not super entralling. But this chapter made it so clear. This chapter made the whole thing worth it. You should be proud of yourself. |
| Vive Ut Vivas 2008-02-16 ch 1, | abuseThis story is really touching, actually. It makes you think about the subject a lot. Nice writing, seriously. (Oh, and I read all the chapters so far, just reviewing the first one for some reason... o_0 don't mind me, I'm weird XD) |
| drkprinkeswarir 2008-02-15 ch 11, | abuse"I didn’t cut Bailey’s arm. " that was beautiful...and this line, this chapter, this story, has me in tears. literal tears. you write beautifully...its all so real, so raw, so touchy, and you brave it with your words. if you dont update this, i will be horribly sad. terribly, horribly, awfully, sad. so update!! please? its really a wonderful story... |
| Dot Cubed 2008-02-14 ch 1, | abuseI really like this! I think it's really realistic, actually...like you can totally tell that this is what an almost-eighth grader would be thinking. It's very well done. There were a few grammar things here and there, but those are minor. |
| friend 49 2008-02-13 ch 10, anon. | abusei think in the next chapter you may want to talk about bailey and her parents. maybe from the perspective of one of them. saying how she changed i guess. :) just an idea though, i just think it would be interesting. really good chapter. i've felt like how meg and ashley did. like no matter what you do they'll never be happy with you. i can relate a lot to this story. good night and cheers to a happy thursday! |
| friend 49 2008-02-12 ch 9, anon. | abuseFor the rest of that week, guys would beep at her in the hall. You know, when garbage trucks back up? - haha they do that in scrubs! when the janitor is making those noises whenever someone self-concious about their weight is moving. and he does it to dr. kelso and he says 'i'm hiring a weight trainer!' it's funny. :) okay so this chapter is really sad. and zoey is so horrible. this portrays how shallow people are so well. perfect. amazing job, dart! |
| friend 49 2008-02-11 ch 8, anon. | abuseTHAT IS SO MEAN OF THEM. HOW DARE THEY DO THAT. NO ONE DESERVES THAT! Okay so I think the rivalry is really shown well in this chapter. And I like Dev a lot haha. Not very much concrit, but I'm excited for the next chapter! |
| Comic Suicide 2008-02-11 ch 7, | abuseI love this story. It's interesting. Continue with it whenever you can please. |