this poem is so honest and raw--
--it's quite amazing, to be honest.
sinking... escape... debating... wish...
i especially liked the line "You and me would mean forever and always". personally, it evokes strong feelings & emotions and i would very much like to see a story from this! *hinthintnudgenudge* haha yes, subtle i am xD

your review of my first and only poem here on fp (so far!) was very much appreciated! thank you for your encouragement to 'keep writing'; that means a lot (:

i hope that you will also continue to write, because i really enjoyed this poem--and i am sure that i will enjoy your other poems/stories.

there were a few typos(you used the wrong your) but it was nice.

I like this poem.It seems as though when I was reading it,the song that I was listening to fits it perfectly.And yeah,like the previous reviewer said it's you're.

Kind of pretty in a simple way. Some more imagery and poetic langauge might help, but it's not bad as is.

"Your my secret get away"
"The fact that your so far away"

--both of these should be "you're".