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| .mate.feed.kill.repeat. 2008-02-04 ch 1, | abuseThis one seems rushed with a very broken rhythm; very unlike yourself. But I understand (kind of) what you're saying and how you don't have secrets but you don't trust him. Only time can bring you that trust back, I guess. -stix- |
| maximusrexmundi 2008-02-04 ch 1, | abuseHmm, well I cant really say anything helpful, so as the old saying goes, I wont say anything at all. Just wait for time to show the way is all I can say (and it rhymes too :) ) |
| simpleplan13 2008-02-04 ch 1, | abuseI don't care I need to shower still... that or if I need to shower seems better to me I like this... the whole idea of ignoring the world because of it is really awesome and I love all the little things you mention... my favorite line was "we might believe them" that was really nice... |
| melbell 2008-02-04 ch 1, | abuselisa? i hope youre okay. why arent you at school? your absence makes me paranoid. good job. i like how it repeats that one part. =] |